O-LevelEnglish LanguageDirected Writing1123/12 · Oct/Nov 2023 · Q130 Marks

You spent part of your recent long vacation at an adventure camp, doing a wide range of activities with lots of other young people. You really liked some aspects of your stay at the camp but disliked others. Your English teacher has now asked you to make a speech to your class about your stay at the camp. Write your speech. You must include the following: • where the camp was and how long you were there for • how staying at the camp benefited you • what you disliked about the camp and why. Cover all three points above in detail. You should make your speech interesting and informative. Start your speech 'Good morning, everyone.'

(a)You spent part of your recent long vacation at an adventure camp, doing a wide range of activities with lots of other young people. You really liked some aspects of your stay at the camp but disliked others. Your English teacher has now asked you to make a speech to your class about your stay at the camp. Write your speech. You must include the following: • where the camp was and how long you were there for • how staying at the camp benefited you • what you disliked about the camp and why. Cover all three points above in detail. You should make your speech interesting and informative. Start your speech 'Good morning, everyone.'[30]

Mark scheme

Marking points from the official mark scheme (Oct/Nov 2023). The mark or mark type is shown in brackets.

[15] Very good understanding of purpose.
[15] Clear awareness of the specified situation and audience.
[15] Text type entirely appropriate.
[15] All required points developed in detail, fully amplified and well organised.
[15] Given information well used to justify personal opinion and interpretation.
[15] Tone and register entirely appropriate.
[15] Highly accurate writing, apart from very occasional slips.
[15] Sentence structures varied for particular effects.
[15] Verb forms largely correct and appropriate tenses consistently used.
[15] Vocabulary wide and precise.
[15] Punctuation accurate and helpful.
[15] Spelling accurate, apart from very occasional slips.
[15] Paragraphs have unity, are linked, and show evidence of planning.

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