The following extract is taken from a journalist's account of the Chilean mining disaster of 2010. When the mine collapsed, thirty-nine miners were trapped underground for sixty-nine days. The account is based on interviews with the miners following their rescue. The sound and the blast wave interrupt thirty-four men labouring inside stone corridors. Men using hydraulic machines to lift stone, men listening to stone crash against the metal beds of dump trucks, men waiting for the lunch truck in a room carved from stone, men drilling into stone, men driving diesel-fed machines down a stone highway, and men wearing eroded stone on their clothes and their faces. 5 The truck driver Raúl Villegas is the only one of the thirty-four miners underground at the moment of the collapse who manages to escape. He watches in horror as a dust cloud gathers in his rearview mirror and quickly overtakes his truck. He speeds through the cloud toward the exit and when he reaches the mouth at which the Ramp opens to the surface, the dust follows him outside. A gritty brown 10 cloud will continue flowing out of that malformed opening for hours to come. Inside the personnel truck at Level 190, Lobos and Galleguillos are the two men closest to the collapse, which hits them as a roar of sound as if a massive skyscraper were crashing down behind them, Lobos said. The metaphor is more than apt. The vast and haphazard architecture of the mine, improvised over the 15 course of a century of entrepreneurial ambition for profit, is finally giving way. A single block of diorite¹, as tall as a forty-five-story building, has broken off from the rest of the mountain and is falling through the layers of the mine, knocking out entire sections of the Ramp and causing a chain reaction as the mountain above it collapses, too. Granitelike stone and ore are knocked loose, pulled downward 20 to crash against other rocks, causing the surviving sections of the mine to shake as if in an earthquake. The dust created and propelled by the explosions shoots sideways, upward, and downward, ejected from one passageway and gallery in the mine’s maze of corridors to the next. In an office about one hundred feet above the mine opening, Carlos Pinilla, the 25 hard-driving general manager, hears the thunder crack and his first thought is: But they’re not supposed to be blasting today. He concludes that it’s probably another collapse of rock inside the Pit, which is nothing to be worried about. But the sound of rolling thunder doesn’t stop. His phone rings, and the voice on the line says, “Step out your door and look at the mine entrance.” Pinilla walks into the midday 30 sun and sees a billowing cloud of dust bigger than any he’s seen before. ¹ diorite: a type of rock
- (a)Comment on the ways in which language and style are used to convey the impact of the event.[15]
- (b)Imagine you are the journalist who wrote the passage. Continue your account of the incident, basing your writing closely on the material in the extract. (Write between 120 and 150 words). You do not need to bring the account to a conclusion.[10]
Mark scheme
Marking points from the official mark scheme (Feb/Mar 2018). The mark or mark type is shown in brackets.
- [13-15] Shows perceptive appreciation of content and ideas. Fluidly relates content to structure, form, audience, purpose, genre, style. Shows keen awareness of intentions of passage.
- [13-15] Analyses text with sensitive and discriminating awareness of how language creates effects. Moves with ease between part and whole in discussing specific examples of language use and the effect of the whole passage.
- [13-15] Strong structure; may be concise; quotation is used fluently, 'embedded' in the argument.
- [10-12] Shows consistent appreciation of content and ideas. Able to relate content to structure, form, audience, purpose, genre, style, main aims of passage.
- [10-12] Analyses text, with awareness of the effects created. Able to relate part to whole in discussing specific examples of language use and the effect of the whole passage.
- [10-12] Strong structure used to convey clear argument.
- [8-10] A perceptive recognition of context, audience, form, and purpose supported by a good range of appropriate vocabulary and expression suitable for the task.
- [8-10] Responses at the top of this band will be persuasive and confident, supported by a consistent, and at best personal, engagement with context and purpose, using fluent and accurate expression accompanied by a strong sense of audience.
- [6-7] A clear and informed sense of purpose, context, form and relevance supported by a reasonable attempt to use language appropriate for the task.
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